"I lived more in the present: savoring hunger, exhaustion, anxiety for my family, humiliations...most of all humiliations (Wiesenthal 9)."
Using this sentence, write a sentence of your own that copies this structure. You might even try to use a powerful verb like "savor" that brings a strong, contrasting connotation! Put your sentence in a comment on my blog post.
Many different teenagers: fat, tall, skinny, short.
ReplyDelete"I love to hunt: like snakes,duck,squirrels... but mostly deer."
ReplyDeleteI live for the game: savoring the short time I have with it, the brotherhood, the friday night kickoffs, and halftime... but most of all the brotherhood.
ReplyDeletemany tipes of fruits: orange, apple, pinapple, watermelon.
ReplyDeletei have lived in more places than i can count: dreading to leave once i have stayed too long, the constant "yes, im new", and yes...my last name is bossi.
ReplyDeleteI dive deep into my pocket book: buying clothes, stressing my limit, living in debt,endless dollar signs.
ReplyDeleteI love cooking foods from different cultures: American, Mexican, Polish, Italian...especially Italian.
ReplyDeleteShe yearned to leave her small town; to meet interesting people, try exotic foods, get lost in the city, experience new cultures... especially experience a different lifestyle.
ReplyDeleteI live for me myself and I only knowing that ima have to give it all up some day.
ReplyDeleteI grew fonder each day: crashing waves, piercing white sand, the never ending sea, the warmth...especially the warmth.
ReplyDeleteI watched the dead tear into her: feelinng the flesh being ripped off as if it was my own, ears shatering as she choked on an endless flow of sceams and blood, numb with fear when she got back up and went to embrace me with false love... and most of all alone, alone and covered in the blood of my lover while stareing at the stains her brains left on the wall mocking me with its heart shape.
ReplyDeleteGeez! What movies have you been watching?! Poetic though.
DeleteI live more in the past than the present: savoring deaf lepard, haroine, hippies, and the blare witch project.. but most of all hippies.
ReplyDeleteI was living in the moment: savoring my youth, my life, my friends, and my family...most of all my family.
ReplyDeleteGood job, Jordan! I used yours as an example!
DeleteI live for my car: hard to keep it clean harder to keep it full of gas... impossible to keep running.
ReplyDeleteI live for the shopping: looking for cloths, paying for the cloths, going home and wearing them.... but mainly going home and wearing the cloths.
ReplyDelete"I love to fish:catfish,striped bass,...mostly large mouth bass.
ReplyDeleteI died this instant moment: from a monsterous bullet,a vicious stab and a peaceful strangle..... most of all a peaceful strangle..
ReplyDeleteI have enjoyed football more I could have imageined: I have savored the sweat, struggled to catch my breath, weathered extreme cold and blistering heat, and yes I'm almost done with poles for life.
ReplyDeleteI live to act: designed to act, diagnosed with type (A)cting blood, made to launch out as someone other than myself, critiqued by my performance not my outward appearance, inspired to reconstruct the art lost through "grade A" movies like Twilight...but mostly to inspire.
ReplyDeleteThere are some nights that I must trudge through: painful ones, wishing ones...but mostly sleepless ones.
ReplyDeleteMy nerves chafed more each day: wishing silence, calm, order within the chaos, prosperity... most of all prosperity.
ReplyDeleteVery nice, Kali! Very smooth and sophisticated syntax.
DeleteI live to eat: savoring breakfast, lunch, dinner, dessert... most of all dessert.
ReplyDeleteThere are many different cars; mini coopers, mustangs, trucks, and vans...most of all vans.
ReplyDeleteI love that 3 oclock feeling: Done working out, schools out... but more of the doof grin on your face because your so happy.
ReplyDeleteI felt disgust for this being: his cigarette grin, beer laced breath, tipsy sarcasm, loving eyes...most of all, those loving eyes.
ReplyDeleteVery interesting contrast between the earlier negative descriptions and the "loving eyes!"
DeleteThere are so many worries in a life time: what will tomorrow bring, who will I be tomorrow, who will walk away from me next...will tomorrow even come?
ReplyDeleteI lived more in the past: reminiscing on the good times, trying to remember my mother's face, forgetting the stanky stench of residue..most of all forgetting the stench of the residue.
ReplyDeleteI love cheeseburgers: The smell, the taste, the tomatoes that you dont really want...most of all the tomatoes you dont really want.
ReplyDeleteI like water: in lakes, in bottles, in the ocean, coming from a hose... most of all coming from a hose.
ReplyDeleteMy days change each day: savoring precious moments, moving past the hard times... but most of all just tyring to be happy.
ReplyDeleteI stopped to catch a glimpse of the my horrific surroundings: overseeing the falling structures, dark clouds, crushed cars, those who found a way to stay alive, and all of the dead traitors... including my wife.
ReplyDeleteI will dream about the ocean: Its waves, its splash, its touch... the way it touches me.
ReplyDeletePoetic! It leads a reader to think of the way an ocean "touches" the soul in comparison to the physical touch of the water.
DeleteI watched all the lights flash by: blurring my vision, perception, emotions, thought... thought was torn away most.
ReplyDeleteI wanted to experience life to the fullest: Beckonning for knowledge, talent, thrills... mostly the thrills.
ReplyDeleteI love hip hop music: Artists such as Nicki Minaj, Drake, Pitbull...most of all Lil Wayne.
ReplyDeleteI lived for the raw emotions: hating the gentle butterflies, the rising heart rate, the hope he gave me...most of all the terrible hope.
ReplyDeleteI LOVE the contrast you put in here! You really grabbed the idea of using contrasting connotations to add depth to a sentence. The oxymoron in the end is great!
DeleteShe lived in a strange world: dreading elation, laughter, and resolution...most strongly resolution.
ReplyDeleteNice job!!!
DeleteWorking hard is a part of life: I savor the sweat, blood, and pain... mostly the pain.
ReplyDeleteShe yearned for a change: to meet new people, experience new things, make new memories.. especially to meet new people.
ReplyDeleteThe proof of what he did to himself was evident: his jaundiced, papery skin, his thin, stringy hair, his sunken, lonely eyes...especially his sunken lonely eyes.
ReplyDeleteVery good! You need to use semicolons to separate ideas here, rather than commas. You already need a comma in each part to separate your two adjectives, so the commas to separate the series are confusing. Try this: "... his jaundiced, papery skin; his thin, stringy hair; his sunken, lonely eyes... especially those sunken, lonely eyes."
DeleteLove your use of parallel structure!
Despite her elation, overbearing thoughts lingered in the recesses of her mind: punishments laying before her, students stares of bewilderment, her parents looks of disappointment...but mostly her parents crushing looks of disappointment.
ReplyDeleteWe desire what we don't have: power, fame, wealth, love...but most of all love.
ReplyDeleteYou prove that sophisticated ideas do not have to be expressed in long sentences with heavy vocabulary. Your simple diction makes this statement more dramatic. I'm using this to introduce a new term for Pre AP- aphorism! An aphorism is a short statement of truth. It is simple, to-the-point, and leads the reader to think about life's BIG IDEAS.
DeleteI ran down that dirt trail in a chaotic whirlwind of emotions: anticipating the adrenaline that would clear my mind of all coherent thought, the throbbing ache that would immobilize my weak, inefficient legs, the monotonous motion of my moving limbs, and the dull off-beat pounding of my unsteady heart...but most of all I yearned for the oblivion granted from the adrenaline of running from what I feared the most.
ReplyDeleteShowcasing lots of skill here! :)
DeleteThere are many different classes: English; Math; History...worst of all, english.
ReplyDeleteamen!
DeleteYep. Love you too, Tyler! Make sure to fix those capitalization errors! ;)
DeleteI love all kinds of chocolate: Hersheys, Twix, 3 Musketeer, Kit-Kat..but most of all Hershey's has to be my favorite.
ReplyDeleteI like nature: observing the deer, turkeys, squirrells... but most of all the deer.
ReplyDeleteI get into the game: passing, setting hitting,blocking... but most of all blocking
ReplyDeletei love so many animals; dogs, cats, cows, horses, snakes, squirels crocs sharks
ReplyDeleteI live more in the present: savoring the hunting trips, killing the animal, skinning it to... most of all eating the animal.
ReplyDeleteWe desire things we cant have: Selena Gomez, Kim Kardashian, Adele, Katy Perry...but most of all Katy Perry.
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ReplyDeleteI like playing different sports: like football ,soccer ,bowling ,basketball...but mainly basketball.
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DeleteWe all go to the refrigerator for the same thing: to find nourishment, to get a refreshing feeling of relaxation from the fullness of your stomach,and to relieve yourself from the painful throb from the hunger in your stomach... especially to contain the never ending pain of hunger.
ReplyDeleteFootball is rough, but I savor every moment of the experiences; blood,pain, sweat, tears,and the great memories of it all, mostly the memories.
ReplyDeleteI love all kinds of chocolate: Twix, 3 Musketeer, Kit-Kat and Hershey's..but most of all Hershey's has to be my favorite.
ReplyDeleteSome among us lust to do things that are far out of our reach: to fly, to breathe under water, to run across tree limbs... but mostly to fly.
ReplyDeleteGood! Like we said in class, move the idea you want emphasized to the end. Make the repetition of that point your most obvious feature.
DeleteI have different classes: English, Math, World History, and Agri... best of all Agri
ReplyDeleteEvery time he was near her she began to fluster with different emotional reactions: stuttering nonsensical phrases, spastically twitching, and laughing at her own awkwardness...most frequently laughing at her own awkwardness.
ReplyDeleteNice job, Bree!
DeleteI like watching alot of sports: football, basketball, scoccer, an baseball; but best of all football
ReplyDelete"Live to live?" Interesting! We are here to experience life- to "taste" it! Who is Larry?
ReplyDeleteI love the feel of the woods: leaves falling around you, animals scurrying to get their breakfast, and the smelling the fresh air...but most of all the clean air.
ReplyDeleteThere are many things on her mind: the way he slammed the door, the disgust on his face, and the disappointment in his voice.. but most of all the look on his face.
ReplyDeleteAs the days go by: The feelings she has for him grows stronger, she prepares herself for disapointment, and waiting to be proved wrong... most of the all the fear of a tragic heartbreak.
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